I have another book review for you. Allow me to preface this by saying I got fed-up with this book 58% of the way into it. It is not often that I just give up on a book, but this one I just could not finish. Alright, let’s dive in with some very basic grammar first.
Here is when you SHOULD change paragraphs:
- When a new character comes along
- A new event happens
- A new idea is introduced
- The setting changes
- A new person is speaking
- Time moves forward or backward by a lot
- The “camera” moves
- When you want to focus heavily on something
Now that you have that information, allow me to show you a screenshot of a page from the book.
Yes, this is just one page, but it is something that happens on just about every page of the book. Within the first ten pages, I counted thirteen clusters of single line paragraphs. Often these single lines paragraphs were interrupted by a run-on sentence.
Oh, and please do not get me started on how often there is swearing in this story. Yes, I get that swearing is an adult thing. I understand that we all do it. That does not mean that there needs to be so much of it. I do not know about you, but most of the people I am around, do not swear almost constantly. Plus, in this case, I feel that it did inhibit the creativity. One of the characters had been beaten up by a group of guys, and instead of coming up with a creative name for them, the characters mostly called them F**ktards.
The last thing I wanted to touch on is how much of a cliché this book was turning out to be. Look I am all for stories about romance, but I just wish that this author had put her own twist on it. Maybe there was one further into the book, but it was not turning out that way.
As always, try it out for yourself and let me know what you think. At this time it is free with Kindle Unlimited.
That is all for today.
Be free and keep reading!